I enjoyed reading your post. I too was an avid aquarist at an early age (many years ago), and find it comforting that young people today remain interested in this great hobby. After a childhood occupied with aquariums and numerous other pets, I went on to attain a PhD in Vetebrate Zoology.
It is my understanding that the manuscript you provide here was acutually a speech. In a spoken presentation both humor and sarcasm can be related to the audience by tone of voice and various manerisms, and these techniques are acceptable to the extent to maintian interest in your listeners. True papers and manuscripts that are not presented "live" are best written in a formal, scientific format (which means more attention to sentence structure, grammer, and word usage). You are correct, Fish NewB, that your document contains no misspelled words, however, your spell check can not determine that you meant to write "wash" instead of "was". I think if you reread the document, you will find other examples also.
Once again, in a speach, your audience will hear what you meant to write, instead of what is actually on the paper. If you are submiting an article for review, however, they only
see what is on the paper.
A couple of other things you might want to reconsider is the listing of Cabomba as a low light plant. While it may survive a few weeks in low light, it will now proliferate in these conditions (it can actually be a difficult plant, and you may want to select a different species to take its place...hornwort, etc.). Also, I would not list all tetras as small
schooling fish suitable for a 10 gallon...silver dollars, buenos aries tetras...etc. would not be good choices.
Overall, I and probably most people on this forum applaud your efforts. Your writing skills will improve in time. None of us "old farts" here wrote (or even thought, for that matter) as a child as we do now. Keep improving and gaining experience with your tanks. You are off to a great start!